Good attempt James. WWW: there is a clear narrative and the structure works really well. Some of your camera work is excellent. EBI: Consider each shot and select the best shot to use. For example; you could have included more OSS, shot-reverse-shot and CU to emphasise the character that is most important at that time.
Good structure to it and well worked with good composure with the characters facial expressions. Also good shot types to show the mood. The things you should consider is make sure that some of the shot types used are to go with the mood more e.g. there could be low angle shots to show the dominance of the character that is arguing with him.
The dialogue and acting of the characters is believable. One small thing is at the beginning Paul asks "Can I have a word mate, outside?" and then they walk the opposite direction down the corridoor and stay inside.
Good attempt James. WWW: there is a clear narrative and the structure works really well. Some of your camera work is excellent.
ReplyDeleteEBI: Consider each shot and select the best shot to use. For example; you could have included more OSS, shot-reverse-shot and CU to emphasise the character that is most important at that time.
Good structure to it and well worked with good composure with the characters facial expressions. Also good shot types to show the mood.
ReplyDeleteThe things you should consider is make sure that some of the shot types used are to go with the mood more e.g. there could be low angle shots to show the dominance of the character that is arguing with him.
The dialogue and acting of the characters is believable.
ReplyDeleteOne small thing is at the beginning Paul asks "Can I have a word mate, outside?" and then they walk the opposite direction down the corridoor and stay inside.